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english assigment.is this tiny story good and did i use the words effectivly..10 POINTS?
how is it? mistakes? mistakes in vocabulary? did i use all them big words correctly?

The Old House

"I dare you, go inside!", Ben shouted, " I bet you wouldn’t last one minute in that relic pile of junk"! "Just watch me", Jill replied. Jill and her brother always fought, but never about somthing as spooky as the "hauted house", as they called it. The old, abandoned house flourished with mould and moss and was left alone for a very long time. "I’ll be waiting right here Jill. bring me back someting from inside the haunted house for me. It will prove that you went in"! Determined and never giving up on a dare, Jill looked up at her brother, "okay. give me a few minutes". She walked up the ancient driveway, out of her brothers sight. once she arrived at the door step, she was a bit scared and lonley. She peeked through the aperture in the door handle before entering, just to make shore everything seemed safe. Ben had always told her the sprit of a ghostly bard roamed the house and still wrote evil poems, curses and spells. He told her that people who spent to much time in the hauted house, would fall victim of his maledictions. "I’ll be quick", jill uttered under her breath. She opened the door and to her vicissitude, spotted somthing she could return to her brother. She grabbed a shiny locket she had found on the floor. Freaked out, Jill exited as fast as she could. Once she got to the bottom of the driveway, she saw that her brother had been waiting for her, with no sign of solicitude. "Wow Jill, I can’t belive you went in!" Ben was marvled. "what did you get"? Jill presented him the locket and together, they opened it and read the etched message: " The one to commit any form of depredation upon this locket shall recive bad luck". "That’s an odd thing to incribe", Jill said "i think i’ll return it in that case…wait here and i’ll throw it back in the haunted house. I dont want to upset the evil bard’s sprit". So Jill, a bit more at ease now, turned around and headed back up the driveway. Her brother said goodbye to her for the last time…she was never seen again after that.

"I dare you, go inside!", Ben shouted,
" I bet you wouldn’t last one minute in that relic pile of junk"! "Just watch me", Jill replied. Jill and her brother always fought, but never about somthing as spooky as the "haunted house", as they called it. The old, abandoned house flourished with mould and moss and had been left alone for a very long time. "I’ll be waiting right here Jill. Bring me back something from inside the haunted house for me. It will prove that you went in"! Determined and never giving up on a dare, Jill looked up at her brother, "Okay. give me a few minutes". She walked up the ancient driveway, out of her brothers sight. Once she arrived at the door step, she was a bit scared and lonely. She peeked through the aperture in the door handle before entering, just to make sure everything seemed safe. Ben had always told her the sprit of a ghostly bard roamed the house and still wrote evil poems, curses and spells. He told her that people who spent to much time in the haunted house, would fall victim of his maledictions. "I’ll be quick", Jill muttered under her breath. She opened the door and to her {vicissitude} [wrong word], spotted something she could return to her brother. She grabbed a shiny locket she had found on the floor. Freaked out, Jill exited as fast as she could.
Once she got to the bottom of the driveway, she saw that her brother had been waiting for her, with no sign of solicitude. "Wow Jill, I can’t belive you went in!" Ben marvelled. "What did you get"? Jill presented him with the locket and together, they opened it and read the etched message: " The one to commit any form of depredation upon this locket shall receive bad luck". "That’s an odd thing to inscribe", Jill said "iIthink i’ll return it in that case…wait here and I’ll throw it back in the haunted house. I dont want to upset the evil bard’s spirit". So Jill, a bit more at ease now, turned around and headed back up the driveway. Her brother said goodbye to her for the last time…she was never seen again after that.

Sal*UK | Sep 07, 2009